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Day 9 — Revision as an ethical choiceYear 11 English · T1 W1–2 · Day 9 lesson

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Year 11 / Term 1 / Weeks 01 02 / English

Part of the full two-week lesson sequence. Check the pack guide and taught point before teaching.

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Teacher copy: This page may include teaching prompts or answer keys. Answer keys in this public library can be viewed by anyone. Give learners a clean prompt, use checks as formative evidence, and change a case locally when prior access matters.

Success: revise overstatement, source imbalance and inaccessible wording while retaining a position.

  1. Recall · 2 min. Learners identify a word in their draft that could overstate certainty: always, everyone, guarantees or another.
  2. Model · 4 min. Revise “Mira proves the shifts are inaccessible” to “Mira's draft shows one reader wants clearer role and travel details.” Explain how scope changes.
  3. Guided check · 5 min. On a sample paragraph, annotate whose voice gets most space and where the exact figures came from. Do not force a falsely equal appraisal; ask for fair representation.
  4. Independent revision · 7 min. Learners complete the newsletter response toward Text C's 130–180-word brief and make two tracked changes: one fixes an unsupported inference; one helps the audience navigate the comparison. Keep original and revised copies; allow agreed extra writing time where needed.
  5. Rehearse · 4 min. Explain one change to a partner, teacher or private recording. Judge evidence use, not extroversion or accent.
  6. Exit · 3 min. Complete “I changed ___ because Text ___ actually says ___.” A valid key cites the exact source and narrows a claim.