Codes: AC9E6LA05, AC9E6LA06, AC9E6LA09, AC9E6LY06. Goal: revise an overstrong sentence with precise verbs and punctuation. Prepare: three original sentences and a word bank records / suggests / proves / may.
- Invite · 2 min. Contrast “The tally proves repairs last” with “The tally records eleven working at closing.” Ask which verb respects B's time boundary.
- Model · 5 min. Write: “Although eleven items worked at closing, the club did not record their condition a week later.” The opening dependent clause needs a comma before the independent clause. Then expand a noun: “The four items that needed parts were not counted as repaired.” The embedded clause identifies which items; no comma is inserted around this restrictive
thatclause. - Guided · 6 min. Repair “Because Ren wanted quiet everyone needs silence” as “Because Ren requested a quieter explanation, the organiser could test an optional quiet route.” Identify the comma after the opening dependent clause, attributed source and modal could rather than an unsupported universal.
- Choice · 6 min. Choose D18-A/B/C. Each route revises a factual boundary and one sentence feature; adult transcription may keep the learner's exact punctuation choices for review.
- Exit · 4 min. Choose
recordsorprovesin “The club log ___ four items waiting for parts at closing.” Records. Ask where the comma goes in “Although the poster is bold the small line remains important.” After bold. - Note · 2 min. Record meaning/grammar separately. If comma is missed but claim strength is sound, teach punctuation on a new sentence without erasing the child's reading inference.
Home/extension: Use two written sentences, no device. Extension: test how “might”, “could” and “will” change a recommendation's certainty.